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Very well written update.. Aap Disha ki confused mindset Ko acche se describe kat rage ho... Story Aap Apne hisab se likhiyega jo filhal hamare liye suspense hai.. keep it up.
One request- Use more pictures to describe situation. (It is just a request).
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ऐसा लगता है कि करण कम वर्ग के आदमी के साथ यौन संबंध रखने के लिए देखना चाहते हैं। इस तरह की कहानी असाधारण है। मैंने बनारसी पनवाला नामक xossip में ऐसी कहानी पढ़ी थी। अगर आप इस तरह की कहानी लिखना चाहते हैं, तो यह कहानी होगी इस मंच में एक ब्लॉकबस्टर। इस संबंध में मेरे पास एक सुझाव है। दीशा को यह नहीं जाने दें कि करण चाहता है कि वह भक्ति के साथ यौन संबंध रखे...
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yah ek bahut garm aur kaamuk kahaanee hai. krpaya niyamit update den.
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Very good start.Keep going.
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बहुत अच्छा शुरूआत। अगले अद्यतन के लिए इंतजार कर रहा है।
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Brother, I am waiting eagerly for your next update.
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आपकी नई कहानी के लिए बहुत धन्यवाद। आपकी लेखन शैली उत्कृष्ट है। पात्रों के बीच कामुक बातचीत एक कहानी को बहुत गर्म और कामुक बनाती है। मुझे उम्मीद है कि आप इस मामले पर विचार करेंगे। आपकी शुभकामनाएँ।
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bahut garm aur kaamuk shuruaat. agale updaten ke lie intajaar kar raha hai.
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Very hot story.waiting for next update.
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Story development is good. Keep it up. Aisi types ki stories aage jake mostly track kho deti hai.. Hope you have fixed plot to proceed with the story and give meaningful climax to it. All the very best. Keep it up.
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कहानी सही दिशा में जा रही है। आपके लेखन कौशल बहुत अच्छे हैं। इस गर्म कहानी के लिए बहुत धन्यवाद।
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