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Champa ke pati ko bhi add karne wale ho kya aage Jake aap
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Baban bhai, nice start and let's hope it's a long inning. Loved your characters. Try to minimise self expanation of a child to avoid extra details distraction. Readers know it that it's a child's protagonist point of view story. Just focus on Dadaji and Bahu. Just a suggestion bro.
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Nice story , plz update soon
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Bahut achi tarah se update thA
keep continue
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बहुत ही शानदार आगाज़ है कहानी का।
तो अंजाम भी उतना ही शानदार होना चाहिए मित्र
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एक बार फिर से एक नए अंदाज में.....................
बहुत जबर्दस्त शुरुआत
ये दादा पहले से ही नौकर के बेटे कि बीवी को फंसाए होगा चुदाई करता होगा
इसीलिए दादीजी कभी इसे साथ नहीं लेकर गयी अपनी बहू के पास
देखते हैं..............कैसे फंसाएगा ये लतिका को
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gajab update bidu. ab dadaji rukne wale nhi hain lagta hai. latika ab kitne dino tk apne gore jawan badan ko apne kapdo se dhak ke rakkhe he dadaji ke samne waiting next
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kya sahi ja rahe ho,bhai...lekin ye bra us k paass aayi kahan se aur ye champa...wala raaj abhi bhi bana hua h...
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Baban bhai agar aap chaho to pic bhi add kar sakte ho
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Abhi huaa hai khel shuru.... dadaji ka asli roop ab ahiste ahiste bahaar aa rahaa hai. Salaa.... patni marr rahi hai aur yeh kamina apni bahu ko lekaar fantasy kar rahaa hai.
Superb update bhai. Reps added
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Bhai update kab tak aaayega