18-01-2020, 05:28 PM
Rebel_Jatt naam hai yaar da. Bade chir baad ek kahani likhan lagga haan. Ummeed han bhulle nahi hovoge. Punjabi vich kahani likhan da ek alag hi maza hai. Par Punjabi vich likhan wale bahut ghatt ne utton je koi likhda vi hai tan response bahut ghatt milda hai ja phir kai likhan waleyan vich akad vi bahut hundi hai. Nikki jehi gall piche tata baye bye karan lag jande hann. Samjhan di lod hai ke har koi achcha ja jis tara tahnu achcha lagge, us tara nahi likh sakda. Jekar kahani achchi nahi vi lagdi tan vi do shabad thanks de bol ke honsla afzai kar deni chahidi hai. Agge ton likhan da bal milda hai. Update-update da raula payun wale bahut han par likhan wala ik adha hi. Thodi bahut koshish khud vi karo, changa madha jis taran da vi likh sakde ho; jaroor likho. Punjabi section vich raunak bann ni chahidi hai. Hor koi vi section dekh lo; hindi, telgu, English, urdu ek ton badhke ek kahaniyan hann, likhan wale hann. Par sade raula payun wale jyada hann, mehnat karan wala koi koi.
Jaroori nahi koi bahut vaddiyan kahaniyan likhiye. Chotiyan chotiyan kahaniyan, ideas vi likh sakde haan. Te kade vi kise nu mazboor na karo apne anusar kahani da rukh modhan lai. Har kise di apni fantasy hundi hai, har koi apne maze lai kahani likhda hai is lai kise nu vi mazboor na karo. Kise nu adultery pasand hai tan kise nu cucold te kise nu incest. Achchi nahi lagdi ta na padho, bas madha na bolo. Thodi koshish khud karo likhan di. Koi itthe sahit academy da award ni milna is lai jis taran da vi likh sakde ho likho te Punjabi section nu bulandia wall le jao. Punjabi section di inni madhi halat dekh ke dukh hunda hai. Har roz navi kahani ayundi rehni chahidi hai. Is lai yaaro koshish karo. Sare koshish karo.
Gall baat bahut ho gai hun kahani suru kariye.
Bahut sama pehlan xossip te kahani likhi si, Mazedaar Bhulekha. Badi copy hoi oh kahani. Punjabi vich likhi si. Ate Punjabi vich likhna kina mushkil hai tusin jande hi hovoge. Mehnat badi aayi. Char panj din lag gaye par ant kahani meri pasand anusar bann gai. Usnu agge vi likhanga jalad hi. Bhapaji naala nahi khuld; vi update hovegi. Amrita meri last story vi complete hovegi. Time aj kall ghatt hi hunda hai is lai chotiyan kahaniyan te hi zor hovega. Eh kahani vi Mazedaar Bhulekha hi Hai Part two.
ਮਜ਼ੇਦਾਰ ਭੁਲੇਖਾ -2
Poora ik hafta mausam kharab hon ton baad ajj dhupp nikkli si. Pehlan do tin din baddal chaye rahe te phir tin din meenh penda riha si. Saver ton dhundh chayi hoi si te hun dopehar de time ja ke halki halki dhupp nkkli si. Naseeb Kaur te uhdi nunh Jyoti ikk hafte ton jama kapde dho ke hatiyan sann. Kapde dhonn ton baad Naseeb kaur nahayun lagdi hai jadke Jyoti chatt te kapde sukkne payun lagdi hai. Kapdeyan da poora ambar lagga hoya si, lagda si jiven sare saal de kapde ikko din dhote hon. Kapde sukhan lai banniyan hoyiyan taran te addhe kapde vi nahi aaye sann. Jyoti vichari banere punjh punjh ke kapde pa rehi si. Eh siraf is ghar di gall hi nahi si, sare pind vich jidhar marji nazar maar lavo har paase kapde hi kapde nazar aa rahe sann.
Akhir Jyoti vehli ho ke jadd thalle pahunchi tan usdi sass Naseeb kaur naha ke bathroom cho bahar nikkal rehi si. Naseeb Kaur chaliyan di ho ke vi bahut sohni si. Injh lagda si jiven umar vadhan de naal naal oh hor vi sohni hundi ja rehi si. khulle balan nu tauliye naal ragardan ton baad oh shawl lappet lendi hai. Naha ke usnu thand lagan lagan laggi si. Dhupp bhaven kaafi si par thandi hawa karke unjh hi pala chidh riha si.
“Mummy tusin koti tan pa layo. Kalle suit vich thand lag jaani aa” Jyoti ne Balti rekhdi ne kiha. Usdi banh te suit te tauliya si jo oh uppron ayundi hoyi le ke aayi si.
“Putt kotiyan taan sariyan dho dittiyan. Hun tan bass ayun jane waliyan payiyan. Main keha kite choh vagera na lag jave” Naseeb Kaur shawl nu ghut ke pinde dwale lende hoyi boli.
“Oh jehdi Karani jehi koti si tuhadi? Oh tani dhoti. Oho pa lende.”
“Putt oh tan main baiyarani nu de ditti. Oh vichari pati jehi ikko koti pa ke rakhdi si. Main tan hun kade pai hi nahi si. purani bi bahli si. Main keha chalo gareebani da butta lag jayu. Inni thand vich bada aukha aa” Naseeb Kaur dil di changi si is layi usdi nunh Jyoti usnu bahut manndi si.
“Tusin meri koti pa lavo. Main uppar bed te kadh ke rakh ke aayi aa. Main hor pa laoo. Mere kol tan batheriyan ne”
“Rehan de ni. Main hun roti banayun laggi aa. Teje de ayun da time ho geya. Chulle mohre aape ni thand lagni”
“le eh ki gall hoi. Bimar ho gaye phir. Jao koti pa lao. Main naha ke ayundi aa. Idda kareyo pehlan chah bana layo. Thand leh javegi. Menu tan agge Kamba chidiya peya aa. Baraf varga paani utton inne kapde. Mere tan jama hath pair sunn ho gaye. Roti main tuhade naal bana devangi nale agg sek lavange” Jyoti gusalkhane vich vardi boli.
“chal theek aa. Tu naha ke aaja. Main jadd takk chah banyundi aa”
“Koti pa leyo pehlan” Jyoti ne bathroom da darwaja band kardi ne keha.
“Oh pa lendi aa baba” Naseebo ne muskrayundi ne kiha. Thand usnu vi bahut lag rehi si. Jyoti te Teje da karma uppar chubare vich si. Modern ghar nahi si, simple par changa baneya hoyeya si. Naseebo aje paudhiyan chadhan hi laggi si ke usnu vehde vich motorcycle di awaz suni. Teja kheton mudh aaya si.
Kamre andar bed te ek nili koti payi si. Naseebo nu oh jyada hi fansy laggi. Ohne almari kholi te sariyn kotiyan dekhan laggi. Par sariyan hi fancy sann.
“Chall thalle hi payuni aa. Kehda kise ne dekhni aa. Pata ni ayuni vi ke nahi” Naseebo ne koti nu ulat palat ke dekheya phir uhne apna shawl utar ke bed te sutt ditta te koti payun lag payi.
Kheton ayundeya Teja siddha uppar kamre nu chala geya. Hath pair mitti naal bhare si par us waqat us kolo sabar nahi ho riha si. Sabr hunda vi kive. Aje che mahine pehlan hi usda veyah hoyeya si. Utton Jyoti vi poori jwan rajj ke sohni. Paudiyan chadhde de Teje da lun akad geya si. Jadd oh kamre vich dakhal hoyeya tan Jyoti usnu bed de kinare khadhi koti payundi dikhi. Khulle kale baal usdi bund takk latak rahe sann. Koti di banha tight sann. Is layi jadd sehaj subha Jyoti ne bahan uppar nu chukk ke koti pai tan picho usdai bund hichkole khan laggi. Teje nu ajj apni gharwali di bund kujh jyada hi moti laggi. Usde lun ne pazame vich jhatka mareya. Teja dabbe pair Jyoti de piche geya te phir usne ik pal lai position lai. Usde bullan te srarti muskaan si. Agle hi pal usne Jyoti nu picheyon ghut ke jaffi pa lyi. Jyoti ne ikdum jhatka khadha. Sayad darr gai si. Usne apne aap nu shudaona chahyea par Teje ne chaddan di bajay usnu hor vi ghutt leya. Usda khada lun Jyoti di bund te thokran maar riha si. Uppron usne jaldi dena apne dono hath Jyoti de mummeyan te rakh ditte. Jyoti hor zor naal khud nu chudayun layi sarir nu jhatkadi hai. Uston chutt tan na hoyeya par usde injh jhatke maran naal Teje da lun hor akad geya jehda used chitdan vicho hunda hoya usdi fuddi takk ragad reha si. Teje nu apni gharwali de injh chatptayun naal hor maza aa riha si. Ajj Jyoti di bund de naal naal usde mumme bi kujh jyada hi mote-mote mehsoos ho rahe sann. Teje de chehre te Jyoti de khulle baal hon karke usnu kujh nazar tan nahi aa riha si par ajj usde mumme kujh jyada hi bhare lag rahe sann te hathan cho bhar dull rahe sann.
“Ki gall! Ajj agla pichla saman jyada bhara lag reha aa”
“Ve khasma nu khaneyan teri ma aa main” Teje nu ikk pall lai apne kanna te yakeen na hoyeya. Usnu samajh hi na ayya ke oh ki kare te ki na kare.
“Ve hun tan chadh de khasma” Naseebo cheekh hi pai si. Teja aje vi used mummeyan nu nappi khada si. Agle hi pal jiven neend ton jageya. Usne foran apni ma de mummeyan to hath chukke te piche hatt geya. Naseeb Kaur phat dena piche nu murhi. Usda chehra gusse naal bhareya peya si. ik pall lai Teje nu lagga jive usdi ma usde thappad maaran laggi hai. Par Naseebo Teje te ik nazar maar ke teji naal kamre cho bahr nikkal gayi. Usne apna Shawl vi nahi leya si.
Jaroori nahi koi bahut vaddiyan kahaniyan likhiye. Chotiyan chotiyan kahaniyan, ideas vi likh sakde haan. Te kade vi kise nu mazboor na karo apne anusar kahani da rukh modhan lai. Har kise di apni fantasy hundi hai, har koi apne maze lai kahani likhda hai is lai kise nu vi mazboor na karo. Kise nu adultery pasand hai tan kise nu cucold te kise nu incest. Achchi nahi lagdi ta na padho, bas madha na bolo. Thodi koshish khud karo likhan di. Koi itthe sahit academy da award ni milna is lai jis taran da vi likh sakde ho likho te Punjabi section nu bulandia wall le jao. Punjabi section di inni madhi halat dekh ke dukh hunda hai. Har roz navi kahani ayundi rehni chahidi hai. Is lai yaaro koshish karo. Sare koshish karo.
Gall baat bahut ho gai hun kahani suru kariye.
Bahut sama pehlan xossip te kahani likhi si, Mazedaar Bhulekha. Badi copy hoi oh kahani. Punjabi vich likhi si. Ate Punjabi vich likhna kina mushkil hai tusin jande hi hovoge. Mehnat badi aayi. Char panj din lag gaye par ant kahani meri pasand anusar bann gai. Usnu agge vi likhanga jalad hi. Bhapaji naala nahi khuld; vi update hovegi. Amrita meri last story vi complete hovegi. Time aj kall ghatt hi hunda hai is lai chotiyan kahaniyan te hi zor hovega. Eh kahani vi Mazedaar Bhulekha hi Hai Part two.
ਮਜ਼ੇਦਾਰ ਭੁਲੇਖਾ -2
Poora ik hafta mausam kharab hon ton baad ajj dhupp nikkli si. Pehlan do tin din baddal chaye rahe te phir tin din meenh penda riha si. Saver ton dhundh chayi hoi si te hun dopehar de time ja ke halki halki dhupp nkkli si. Naseeb Kaur te uhdi nunh Jyoti ikk hafte ton jama kapde dho ke hatiyan sann. Kapde dhonn ton baad Naseeb kaur nahayun lagdi hai jadke Jyoti chatt te kapde sukkne payun lagdi hai. Kapdeyan da poora ambar lagga hoya si, lagda si jiven sare saal de kapde ikko din dhote hon. Kapde sukhan lai banniyan hoyiyan taran te addhe kapde vi nahi aaye sann. Jyoti vichari banere punjh punjh ke kapde pa rehi si. Eh siraf is ghar di gall hi nahi si, sare pind vich jidhar marji nazar maar lavo har paase kapde hi kapde nazar aa rahe sann.
Akhir Jyoti vehli ho ke jadd thalle pahunchi tan usdi sass Naseeb kaur naha ke bathroom cho bahar nikkal rehi si. Naseeb Kaur chaliyan di ho ke vi bahut sohni si. Injh lagda si jiven umar vadhan de naal naal oh hor vi sohni hundi ja rehi si. khulle balan nu tauliye naal ragardan ton baad oh shawl lappet lendi hai. Naha ke usnu thand lagan lagan laggi si. Dhupp bhaven kaafi si par thandi hawa karke unjh hi pala chidh riha si.
“Mummy tusin koti tan pa layo. Kalle suit vich thand lag jaani aa” Jyoti ne Balti rekhdi ne kiha. Usdi banh te suit te tauliya si jo oh uppron ayundi hoyi le ke aayi si.
“Putt kotiyan taan sariyan dho dittiyan. Hun tan bass ayun jane waliyan payiyan. Main keha kite choh vagera na lag jave” Naseeb Kaur shawl nu ghut ke pinde dwale lende hoyi boli.
“Oh jehdi Karani jehi koti si tuhadi? Oh tani dhoti. Oho pa lende.”
“Putt oh tan main baiyarani nu de ditti. Oh vichari pati jehi ikko koti pa ke rakhdi si. Main tan hun kade pai hi nahi si. purani bi bahli si. Main keha chalo gareebani da butta lag jayu. Inni thand vich bada aukha aa” Naseeb Kaur dil di changi si is layi usdi nunh Jyoti usnu bahut manndi si.
“Tusin meri koti pa lavo. Main uppar bed te kadh ke rakh ke aayi aa. Main hor pa laoo. Mere kol tan batheriyan ne”
“Rehan de ni. Main hun roti banayun laggi aa. Teje de ayun da time ho geya. Chulle mohre aape ni thand lagni”
“le eh ki gall hoi. Bimar ho gaye phir. Jao koti pa lao. Main naha ke ayundi aa. Idda kareyo pehlan chah bana layo. Thand leh javegi. Menu tan agge Kamba chidiya peya aa. Baraf varga paani utton inne kapde. Mere tan jama hath pair sunn ho gaye. Roti main tuhade naal bana devangi nale agg sek lavange” Jyoti gusalkhane vich vardi boli.
“chal theek aa. Tu naha ke aaja. Main jadd takk chah banyundi aa”
“Koti pa leyo pehlan” Jyoti ne bathroom da darwaja band kardi ne keha.
“Oh pa lendi aa baba” Naseebo ne muskrayundi ne kiha. Thand usnu vi bahut lag rehi si. Jyoti te Teje da karma uppar chubare vich si. Modern ghar nahi si, simple par changa baneya hoyeya si. Naseebo aje paudhiyan chadhan hi laggi si ke usnu vehde vich motorcycle di awaz suni. Teja kheton mudh aaya si.
Kamre andar bed te ek nili koti payi si. Naseebo nu oh jyada hi fansy laggi. Ohne almari kholi te sariyn kotiyan dekhan laggi. Par sariyan hi fancy sann.
“Chall thalle hi payuni aa. Kehda kise ne dekhni aa. Pata ni ayuni vi ke nahi” Naseebo ne koti nu ulat palat ke dekheya phir uhne apna shawl utar ke bed te sutt ditta te koti payun lag payi.
Kheton ayundeya Teja siddha uppar kamre nu chala geya. Hath pair mitti naal bhare si par us waqat us kolo sabar nahi ho riha si. Sabr hunda vi kive. Aje che mahine pehlan hi usda veyah hoyeya si. Utton Jyoti vi poori jwan rajj ke sohni. Paudiyan chadhde de Teje da lun akad geya si. Jadd oh kamre vich dakhal hoyeya tan Jyoti usnu bed de kinare khadhi koti payundi dikhi. Khulle kale baal usdi bund takk latak rahe sann. Koti di banha tight sann. Is layi jadd sehaj subha Jyoti ne bahan uppar nu chukk ke koti pai tan picho usdai bund hichkole khan laggi. Teje nu ajj apni gharwali di bund kujh jyada hi moti laggi. Usde lun ne pazame vich jhatka mareya. Teja dabbe pair Jyoti de piche geya te phir usne ik pal lai position lai. Usde bullan te srarti muskaan si. Agle hi pal usne Jyoti nu picheyon ghut ke jaffi pa lyi. Jyoti ne ikdum jhatka khadha. Sayad darr gai si. Usne apne aap nu shudaona chahyea par Teje ne chaddan di bajay usnu hor vi ghutt leya. Usda khada lun Jyoti di bund te thokran maar riha si. Uppron usne jaldi dena apne dono hath Jyoti de mummeyan te rakh ditte. Jyoti hor zor naal khud nu chudayun layi sarir nu jhatkadi hai. Uston chutt tan na hoyeya par usde injh jhatke maran naal Teje da lun hor akad geya jehda used chitdan vicho hunda hoya usdi fuddi takk ragad reha si. Teje nu apni gharwali de injh chatptayun naal hor maza aa riha si. Ajj Jyoti di bund de naal naal usde mumme bi kujh jyada hi mote-mote mehsoos ho rahe sann. Teje de chehre te Jyoti de khulle baal hon karke usnu kujh nazar tan nahi aa riha si par ajj usde mumme kujh jyada hi bhare lag rahe sann te hathan cho bhar dull rahe sann.
“Ki gall! Ajj agla pichla saman jyada bhara lag reha aa”
“Ve khasma nu khaneyan teri ma aa main” Teje nu ikk pall lai apne kanna te yakeen na hoyeya. Usnu samajh hi na ayya ke oh ki kare te ki na kare.
“Ve hun tan chadh de khasma” Naseebo cheekh hi pai si. Teja aje vi used mummeyan nu nappi khada si. Agle hi pal jiven neend ton jageya. Usne foran apni ma de mummeyan to hath chukke te piche hatt geya. Naseeb Kaur phat dena piche nu murhi. Usda chehra gusse naal bhareya peya si. ik pall lai Teje nu lagga jive usdi ma usde thappad maaran laggi hai. Par Naseebo Teje te ik nazar maar ke teji naal kamre cho bahr nikkal gayi. Usne apna Shawl vi nahi leya si.
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