Adultery Anita Singh - Story of a Seductive Housewife

[seansean007]

I don't agree with this. 

When they are interacting, we hear what both have to say. Even then, we are given a clearer picture of what Anita is thinking/feeling with much more emphasis than what Hariya is feeling or thinking.

When they are not interacting, i.e. when Anita is at home or anywhere not with Hariya, we only know what she is thinking. We do not have a comparable window into Hariya's thoughts. Obviously, i understand the story's title is "Anita Singh", and not "Anita Singh and Hariya", so naturally there will be much greater emphasis on her thoughts. In thermodynamics terms, she's the system and everything else is the surrounding. We are more concerned with the system.

But nonetheless, as a reader, I do get to have opinions which aren't the same as the writer. The writer owns the story.

To Sean' reply, your dialogue writing, while repetitive to some extent, does masterfully serve one major objective that is to heighten arousal incrementally in each update. But I don't think it does fully expose Hariya's feelings towards Anita other than lust and delight at finding her so receptive to his increasingly bold advances.

Thank you for the kind words. I am glad that the dialogues have served the purpose of increasing the arousal. The reasons the dialogues seem repetitive is 1. Hariya is trying to put whatever he says in Anita's mind so he keeps repeating it. 2. Sexual tension is more when even in real life you keep the erotic conversation repetitive, for example what Hariya does is keep praising Anita's body in various ways. (the repetitive conversation arousing you is a proof and that's what I wanted to achieve). I hope I was able to provide a justification for the dialogues being repetitive. There are other reasons as well but don't want to stretch the explanation. 

As for Hariya's feeling, yeah I haven't expressed explicitly how he feels about Anita and that's on purpose. I like to reveal only that much which I consider necessary at any given point of the story. Till now whatever little bit of that I wanted to reveal is revealed through dialogues and expression (I believe you and other readers understand to an extent what kind of feeling he has for Anita). 

Hope I have been able to clarify and give a proper reply. Feel free to share your thoughts. As a reader you do have the right to have your opinion, more so as someone who has always actively kept the thread alive. I will always welcome mature readers who come up with their thoughts on the story and engage in meaningful conversation. 

Thanks.