20-09-2022, 06:09 AM
(This post was last modified: 20-09-2022, 06:17 AM by The Last samurai. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
Thank you Krish for the update. As I said before , I did not want to comment and just read the story but so many readers are commenting otherwise. So just taught of penning down my thinking.
Relax guys it's just one more story in this forum. So don't try to be emotional behind it. From beginning only we knew Meera is going to sleep with Desai. If not than this story would have not been there right. Than why make fuss of it. U r creating confusion to author. From beginning only u were asking when Meera will be sleeping with Desai. When she is finally doing it , u r telling it it's disgusting. What u were expecting a great love story ha ha ha it's not the theme is cuckold.
To author Krish u did great job. U heard the readers this time. Coming to story initiallly I taught , u were closing the story abruptly. That would have been devastating end to this masterpiece. U did great job in curving this story from that situation to bring back where it was. The final part between Desai and Meera was very erotic considering Krish was listening to it. It was literally boring to hear everything from Desai before because firstly ,don't know whether he telling the truth or not and secondly Meera pov was missing all along. Now that has got completed this time. Looked like last erotic part was bit short and Meera did not express her self fully. Looked like she was suppressed may be due to environment like car or nervousness due to people arround. Request is not to eliminate Desai now and make one more full part at Krish home, with either Krish listening or seeing the game. That will be the perfect situation to know Meera fully.
Don't know what agony u are talking about, this is there since the beginning of story. Looks like there will be an devastating end to the story. Just think it off. End on happy note will be good thinking. Piyush character is but confusing. Don't know what role he has in Krish life in future. Desai looks desparate to have Meera by any means. He literally begged in front of couple. But we have to understand, what criminal mindset he had from beginning. Suddenly so much change looks unbelievable. Some shock might be waiting for us in future.
Meera as a character is pretty confusing. The part with photo is purse , she looked like strong woman. Who can change the course of story, stop everything and get on with life. But in later part looked like she gave up easily. Her behaviour changes abruptly in presence of Desai. Cant say it's love towards Desai. May be she can't forget the pleasure what he gives her so she gives up easily. As it's already said in proverb " kamaturanam na bhayam na lajja ". So may be that's not love it's just lust . So that may the reason she can detach herself fast from any situation.
On other hand , Intention of Krish is clear from beginning he is cuckold. He was imagining Meera with everyone in this part and shagging. So there is no confusion when it comes to him. May be he was avoiding Desai only due to his cruel nature. If Desai was same as now in beginning he would have given up easily in beginning itself. I don't have any mercy on Krish. He is getting what he deserves. He is responsible for what he is getting. He had many opportunities to end all nonsense and get on with life but he failed at every instant. So this is what he deserves.
Story is poised good now need to see how it proceeds further. Request is one more big part between meer and Desai where Meera opens up fully. That will give clear understanding of Meera and her pov. I am not talking about porn sex. It should be erotic sex with teasing , sex talk and involving Krish as it was in last part. This story can go anywhere from now lots of options let's see.
I was always keen to know about author Krish. It's very difficult to revel ur self in this forum. Just want to know, are u by chance in same profession related to story writing, like arts background may be serial , movies or story writer. Or may be teaching profession which is evident by ur command over English, the words u use some time we have to use dictionary to get the meaning. Outstanding command over language. We may scold u for u direction in writing ,when u want to do ur own thing without considering the audience, apart from that u r good in other aspects. Try to reveal something about ur self might be at the end of chapter without telling ur original identity. U r doing great job Krish it's very difficult to keep aside so much time from personal life towards this tory which is masterpiece in itself. Hats off to u and ur dedication. U dont get any benefits from this story still u come , listen to all positive and negative comments and give ur time. We will always be indebted for ur dedication. Anyways thanks and all the best hope u end on good note to this masterpiece.
Relax guys it's just one more story in this forum. So don't try to be emotional behind it. From beginning only we knew Meera is going to sleep with Desai. If not than this story would have not been there right. Than why make fuss of it. U r creating confusion to author. From beginning only u were asking when Meera will be sleeping with Desai. When she is finally doing it , u r telling it it's disgusting. What u were expecting a great love story ha ha ha it's not the theme is cuckold.
To author Krish u did great job. U heard the readers this time. Coming to story initiallly I taught , u were closing the story abruptly. That would have been devastating end to this masterpiece. U did great job in curving this story from that situation to bring back where it was. The final part between Desai and Meera was very erotic considering Krish was listening to it. It was literally boring to hear everything from Desai before because firstly ,don't know whether he telling the truth or not and secondly Meera pov was missing all along. Now that has got completed this time. Looked like last erotic part was bit short and Meera did not express her self fully. Looked like she was suppressed may be due to environment like car or nervousness due to people arround. Request is not to eliminate Desai now and make one more full part at Krish home, with either Krish listening or seeing the game. That will be the perfect situation to know Meera fully.
Don't know what agony u are talking about, this is there since the beginning of story. Looks like there will be an devastating end to the story. Just think it off. End on happy note will be good thinking. Piyush character is but confusing. Don't know what role he has in Krish life in future. Desai looks desparate to have Meera by any means. He literally begged in front of couple. But we have to understand, what criminal mindset he had from beginning. Suddenly so much change looks unbelievable. Some shock might be waiting for us in future.
Meera as a character is pretty confusing. The part with photo is purse , she looked like strong woman. Who can change the course of story, stop everything and get on with life. But in later part looked like she gave up easily. Her behaviour changes abruptly in presence of Desai. Cant say it's love towards Desai. May be she can't forget the pleasure what he gives her so she gives up easily. As it's already said in proverb " kamaturanam na bhayam na lajja ". So may be that's not love it's just lust . So that may the reason she can detach herself fast from any situation.
On other hand , Intention of Krish is clear from beginning he is cuckold. He was imagining Meera with everyone in this part and shagging. So there is no confusion when it comes to him. May be he was avoiding Desai only due to his cruel nature. If Desai was same as now in beginning he would have given up easily in beginning itself. I don't have any mercy on Krish. He is getting what he deserves. He is responsible for what he is getting. He had many opportunities to end all nonsense and get on with life but he failed at every instant. So this is what he deserves.
Story is poised good now need to see how it proceeds further. Request is one more big part between meer and Desai where Meera opens up fully. That will give clear understanding of Meera and her pov. I am not talking about porn sex. It should be erotic sex with teasing , sex talk and involving Krish as it was in last part. This story can go anywhere from now lots of options let's see.
I was always keen to know about author Krish. It's very difficult to revel ur self in this forum. Just want to know, are u by chance in same profession related to story writing, like arts background may be serial , movies or story writer. Or may be teaching profession which is evident by ur command over English, the words u use some time we have to use dictionary to get the meaning. Outstanding command over language. We may scold u for u direction in writing ,when u want to do ur own thing without considering the audience, apart from that u r good in other aspects. Try to reveal something about ur self might be at the end of chapter without telling ur original identity. U r doing great job Krish it's very difficult to keep aside so much time from personal life towards this tory which is masterpiece in itself. Hats off to u and ur dedication. U dont get any benefits from this story still u come , listen to all positive and negative comments and give ur time. We will always be indebted for ur dedication. Anyways thanks and all the best hope u end on good note to this masterpiece.
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