Incest Sulaghde Akhar - Mini Kahaniya (ਸੁਲਘਦੇ ਅੱਖਰ- ਮਿੰਨੀ ਕਹਾਣੀ ਸੰਗ੍ਰਹਿ)

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Don't mind but this story has few loopholes. Kuch galtian Hun.
1) Kis school ch roz red ya white suit pa ke jaa sakde? Har school da ik dress code hunda.

2) White suit ch black bra saaf disdi. Usdi maa ne v nahin rokeya? It's strange.

3) 8 baje inha hanera v nahin hunda ki koi nere aaye te chehra v na pata lage. Nale Jado Inna kuj kar gaya, usnu tan v usda chehra nazar nahin aaya. Eh v unrealistic hai.

Don't mind. I just tell them so that you may improve .

Badiya thodia galtian labhia. Main te socheya si vahwa labhngia lol. Kyuki nobody is perfect. Anyways thanks for the feedback. Sad to see that you didnt even said few good words about the story. No worries.

Hun ehna loopholes bare: 
1. Sade weleya ch white kameez te grey ya blue shalwar kayia schoola di dress si. Te ek din week da aisa vi si jdo koi vi kapda paun di khull hundi si. 

2. Maa rok dendi taan kahani agge kive jandi? Lol

3. Seyala de dina ch kaafi hanera ho janda 8 vaje. Hun tusi kehna je seyal hai te oh koti sweater kyon nahi paake jandi har jagah hahaha. Apne hisab nal oh mahina samjhlo bhi jado hanera vi chheti ho janda te aje kotia vi nahi payia si. Lol. Baaki ek tan hanera si dooja pyar ch anni si oh tan nahi si chehra dikheya.

Main aapne hisab nal likh ditta si agge to dheyan rakhu. Feedback layi bahut bhaut dhanwaad.