Incest Pass -e- Parda (Ik Be Misal Kahani)

[Horsepower]

I don't know whether the readers who have replied here are reading your story properly or not. But I have read all the updates. As I promised that I will give honest and genuine feedback. So here I am giving my few cents on the story.

1) Mother son incest is your choice. But the scene of Parveen and Altaf interaction is not realistic. Parveen is a mother , atleast more mature , so how come she so easily fall on her son.

2) The details of the story are commendable but they fall flat when the premise of the story is predictable. Like how many times the readers have read incest stories where due to accident or any other incident mom-son or bro-sis come close to each other. Means there is nothing creative in the plot. 

3) This is just my feedback and my point of view. Well I love the urdu words and detailed explanation in some parts. I just want you to improve the plot on coming updates and make it more realistic or believable.

4) Don't take it personally , it is just my opinion. Take it as a healthy criticism
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1. Kaka Teri approach ee inni bakwas as keh Punjabi forum te tu angreji jhari ja reha???? Teri sense amreeka naal bohat mildi jehra apna kamm kadhan layee pak-india nu larawn de chakar vich rehnda.
2. Tu dujian di gall karda me kehna tu Meri story aap parhi ee nai. Iss layee k story ch kitrey wi Parveen apney putt te digi ee nai.
3. Incest hamesha accidentally ee Honda a. Kisey aam kurri wango maa pain nu pata k chodya nai ja sakta.. Kaka A4 size de 30 pages likh dittey sirf plot vich te koi sex vex shuru nai Hoya haley iss tu wadh ki creativity ho sakdi?????
4. Jo kujh v ho rahya story Wich eh natural aur 90% sach wa. Eh Meri apni Sachi Kahani wa chawaley jahyey.
5. Eh kahani bohat lambi wa. Jinni tu parhi oh ok din di aa. Uddon Meri Umar 19 saal si te hunn 37 saal wa tu soch keh Kahani kithey to jaoo go.
6. B.P filman wekh k muth Karan walyan layee na te me likh rahya te naa ee ohna di choise layee me ik Sachi Kahani ch koi rangbazi karni. Eh kahani ohna layee jo adab naal Pyar kardey. Jehrey romance suspense sabar te thehrao rakhdey apni tabeat wi h. Jehrey lafzan di jaltrang te jazbat de paichan tu waqif haige.
7. Ghapa ghap te fatafat thoka thaki nu like Karan Waley readers tu maafi chahunda wa.
8. Mera taaluq Punjab - Pakistan tu waa iss layee Urdu alfaz me jaan bujh k nai paa reha balkeh menu sardaran wali Punjabi jehri aaundi oh maximum warat rehaa me.
9. Teri criticism di menu parwah nai. Iss layee k tusi Khair naal kafi negative soch rakhdey o. Tussi te eh v keh rahey o forum te k ikk ee writer different id tu likh reha te naaley comments vee fake was. Jama ee bachgana soch wa Teri. Aithey sb free ch likh rahe wa koi paid writers nai k koi inni sir khapai Karey. 8 ghantey lagdey ik update layee. Samjhey o Mr. Wolf? Tu te yaar koi 9th da student lagda menu. 
10. Me jiss writer tu inspire waa oh rebel jutt a. He oh menu koi Salah dain te most welcome. Me Khud I'm professor, writer te poet was iss layee me janda sb de level nu.


  sb nu request Kar reha k eh ik Sachi Kahani a. Me bohat mushkal time manage kar reha wan. Agar hu kissey ne bachgana comments dittey te me Kahani ithey ee rok deni.
Wasdey raho